Immigration in Argentina
During
the 20th century there was a growth in Argentina population due to a
huge wave of immigration. Because of its enormously variety of opportunities
Argentina was seen as the perfect place where to start again. Europeans
predominately from Spain and Italy made their way to Buenos Aires escaping from
ongoing conflicts within Europe. Moreover, Mercosur Treatment allowed
Paraguayans and Bolivians to enter into the country without special requirements
or documentations. Finally, Argentina provided jobs, health assistance and
education for all its inhabitants without discriminating because of colour of
skin, accent, religion and customs. To conclude, Argentina provided immigrants with an exciting new pathway to success, and gave
them the chance for a better lifestyle.
During the 20th century there was a growth in Argentina population due to a huge wave of immigration. Because of it enormously variety of opportunities Argentina was seen as the perfect place to start again. Europeans predominately from Spain and Italy made their way to Buenos Aires escaping from ongoing conflicts within Europe. Moreover, Mercosur Treatment allowed Paraguayans and Bolivians to enter into the country without special requirements or documentations. Finally, Argentina provided jobs, health assistance and education for all its inhabitants without discriminated because of colour of skin, accent, religion and customs. To conclude, Argentina provided immigrants with an exciting new pathway to success, and gave them the chance to a better lifestyle .
Students: Arruti Sofia
Prokopczuk Maria Belen.
Immigration in Argentina
During the 20th century there was a growth in Argentina population due to a huge wave of immigration. Because of it enormously variety of opportunities Argentina was seen as the perfect place to start again. Europeans predominately from Spain and Italy made their way to Buenos Aires escaping from ongoing conflicts within Europe. Moreover, Mercosur Treatment allowed Paraguayans and Bolivians to enter into the country without special requirements or documentations. Finally, Argentina provided jobs, health assistance and education for all its inhabitants without discriminated because of colour of skin, accent, religion and customs. To conclude, Argentina provided immigrants with an exciting new pathway to success, and gave them the chance to a better lifestyle .
Students: Arruti Sofia
Prokopczuk Maria Belen.
I think the main idea throughout the paragraph is well developed and organised. However, there are some grammar mistakes which need to be corrected. In the second sentence, instead of using "it", you should use the possessive adjective "its" ("Because of its enourmously variety of opportunities.."). Then in the same sentence, the relative pronoun "where" needs to be included: " ..as the perfect place where to start again". Another grammatical mistake can be found in relation to the use of "without". Instead of saying "without discriminated", you should say "without discriminating". Finally, in the conclusion sentence, "the chance to a better lifestyle" should be replaced by "the chance for a better lifestyle".
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